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Okay, holy shit I love these characters interacting. They are all little shitheads in their specific ways and I adored Grim's last line about Nerisse.

The opening line is beautiful, but starting with Arthur's name first in 3rd perspective made me believe that we were following his head for a moment with the rest of the paragraph being his own thoughts on Grim. It wasn't until the second paragraph that I realized we were following Grim's head and I had to go back and reread from the start (or is that the royal 'we' in the hotel?). I tend to start a scene stating the character's name that we are following first to prevent that kind of confusion

I am looking forward to the next entry

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